雅思写作：增强语句表现力的五大王牌
英语课
雅思写作：增强语句表现力的五大王牌
一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：
Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：
1)
Weak: The team members are good players.
Revision: The team members play well.
2)
Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination 1 of tardiness 2.
Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：
1)
Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion 3.
Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
2)
Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：
1、
Poor: My supervisor 4 went past my desk.
Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2、
Poor: She is a careful shopper.
Better: She compares prices and quality.
三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：
1、
Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
Better: Charity has supported the organization.
2、
Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：
1、
Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、
Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、
Redundant 5: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、
Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：
1、
Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、
Weak: I need her financial input 6 before I can guesstimate our expenditures 7 next fall.
Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
n.排除，消除，消灭
- Their elimination from the competition was a great surprise.他们在比赛中遭到淘汰是个很大的意外。
- I was eliminated from the 400 metres in the semi-finals.我在400米半决赛中被淘汰。
n.缓慢；迟延；拖拉
- Her teacher gave her extra homework because of her tardiness. 由于她的迟到，老师给她布置了额外的家庭作业。 来自辞典例句
- Someone said that tardiness is the subtlest form of selflove and conceit. 有人说迟到是自私和自负的最微妙的表现形式。 来自辞典例句
n.提升，晋级；促销，宣传
- The teacher conferred with the principal about Dick's promotion.教师与校长商谈了迪克的升级问题。
- The clerk was given a promotion and an increase in salary.那个职员升了级，加了薪。
n.监督人，管理人，检查员，督学，主管，导师
- Between you and me I think that new supervisor is a twit.我们私下说，我认为新来的主管人是一个傻瓜。
- He said I was too flighty to be a good supervisor.他说我太轻浮不能成为一名好的管理员。
adj.多余的，过剩的；(食物)丰富的；被解雇的
- There are too many redundant words in this book.这本书里多余的词太多。
- Nearly all the redundant worker have been absorbed into other departments.几乎所有冗员，都已调往其他部门任职。
n.输入(物)；投入；vt.把(数据等)输入计算机
- I will forever be grateful for his considerable input.我将永远感激他的大量投入。
- All this information had to be input onto the computer.所有这些信息都必须输入计算机。
n.花费( expenditure的名词复数 )；使用；（尤指金钱的）支出额；（精力、时间、材料等的）耗费
- We have overspent.We'll have to let up our expenditures next month. 我们已经超支了，下个月一定得节约开支。 来自《简明英汉词典》
- The pension includes an allowance of fifty pounds for traffic expenditures. 年金中包括50镑交通费补贴。 来自《简明英汉词典》
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