时间:2019-02-19 作者:英语课 分类:雅思英语


英语课

   雅思写作:增强语句表现力的五大王牌


  一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
  1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:
  Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
  Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
  2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:
  1)
  Weak: The team members are good players.
  Revision: The team members play well.
  2)
  Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination 1 of tardiness 2.
  Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
  3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如:
  1)
  Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion 3.
  Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
  2)
  Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
  Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
  二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。例如:
  1、
  Poor: My supervisor 4 went past my desk.
  Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
  2、
  Poor: She is a careful shopper.
  Better: She compares prices and quality.
  三、尽量运用主动语态。例如:
  1、
  Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
  Better: Charity has supported the organization.
  2、
  Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
  Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
  四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如:
  1、
  Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
  Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
  2、
  Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
  Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
  3、
  Redundant 5: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
  Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
  4、
  Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
  Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
  五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如:
  1、
  Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
  Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
  2、
  Weak: I need her financial input 6 before I can guesstimate our expenditures 7 next fall.
  Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.

n.排除,消除,消灭
  • Their elimination from the competition was a great surprise.他们在比赛中遭到淘汰是个很大的意外。
  • I was eliminated from the 400 metres in the semi-finals.我在400米半决赛中被淘汰。
n.缓慢;迟延;拖拉
  • Her teacher gave her extra homework because of her tardiness. 由于她的迟到,老师给她布置了额外的家庭作业。 来自辞典例句
  • Someone said that tardiness is the subtlest form of selflove and conceit. 有人说迟到是自私和自负的最微妙的表现形式。 来自辞典例句
n.提升,晋级;促销,宣传
  • The teacher conferred with the principal about Dick's promotion.教师与校长商谈了迪克的升级问题。
  • The clerk was given a promotion and an increase in salary.那个职员升了级,加了薪。
n.监督人,管理人,检查员,督学,主管,导师
  • Between you and me I think that new supervisor is a twit.我们私下说,我认为新来的主管人是一个傻瓜。
  • He said I was too flighty to be a good supervisor.他说我太轻浮不能成为一名好的管理员。
adj.多余的,过剩的;(食物)丰富的;被解雇的
  • There are too many redundant words in this book.这本书里多余的词太多。
  • Nearly all the redundant worker have been absorbed into other departments.几乎所有冗员,都已调往其他部门任职。
n.输入(物);投入;vt.把(数据等)输入计算机
  • I will forever be grateful for his considerable input.我将永远感激他的大量投入。
  • All this information had to be input onto the computer.所有这些信息都必须输入计算机。
n.花费( expenditure的名词复数 );使用;(尤指金钱的)支出额;(精力、时间、材料等的)耗费
  • We have overspent.We'll have to let up our expenditures next month. 我们已经超支了,下个月一定得节约开支。 来自《简明英汉词典》
  • The pension includes an allowance of fifty pounds for traffic expenditures. 年金中包括50镑交通费补贴。 来自《简明英汉词典》
标签: 雅思写作
学英语单词
-rific
Abel tests
All 's well that ends well.
androgynises
anti-independence
association for computing machinery (acm)
atteveld
ball hockey
Bas-en-Basset
Berl saddles
bromatological
burkaed
call someone's bluff
capital-in-excess account
Carex peiktusani
center upset
cerium materials/devices
charlesite
cloisters
congestion window
constancies
crenimugil crenilabi
cum towel
david turner
decorrelations
DIFI
direct cycle access storage device (dasd)
discrete-time convolution property
document storage status
dysosma veitchii (hemsl. et wils. fu)
easy on the trigger
easy-to-grasp
ecological engineering
epicanthal fold
esophagectomies
eulogious
expenditure for procurement
fire hole ring
Formosa B.
Gave d'Oloron
high speed ball mill
inferior tarsal muscle
interlock control
knife file
Kogushi
latching logic
left ventriculo-aortic conduit
limit of integration
locking pushbutton
long-stem nozzle
lpci open signal
Macdowel's frenum
main scheduling routine
make your presence felt
masson disk
matching magnet
mergers-and-acquisitions
metatracheal wide type
methylglutaconyl
Mixed Mode CD
mobiliary art
monoclines
multiple storage
multiple utility
nanotexturing
neural anesthesia
oath-rite
odman
pearlins
pedatilobed
petewilliamsite
Phenazodine
pipeline conveyor
polyanionic surfactant
potassium methyl sulfate
preserved meat
primary marketing
propylmercuric bromide
punch-tape code
pusher bar
quasi-factorical design
rabbinish
rack up
RAID4
ranking form
remote control rack
resonant vibrator
Rikuzentakata
running latte
secondary peduncle
shear-plate nozzle
struma colloides cystica
suburbans
table napkin
Tensift, Oued
Tismana
transportin
unit start-up and commissioning
unshadowable
upganger
vacuum packer
vehicle currency