英语语法：118 Comma Splice

By Mignon Fogarty

I decided 1 to write about comma splices 3 because my friend Scott Sigler has a book coming out this week, Ancestor, published by Crown. Over three years ago, when he was publishing an earlier version of the book with a smaller publisher, he asked me to read it for him and be as brutal 4 as possible with my comments. The biggest problem I found was comma splices.

How to Use Commas

Commas are tricky 5 because there are so many different ways you can use them, but one of the most common ways to use commas is to separate two main clauses that are connected by a coordinating 6 conjunction. That just means that when you join two things that could be sentences on their own with a word such as “and,” “but,” or “or,” you need a comma before the conjunction:

Squiggly ran to the forest, and Aardvark chased the peeves 7.

Squiggly ran to the forest is a complete sentence, and Aardvark chased the peeves is also a complete sentence. To join them with a comma, you need the word “and” or some other coordinating conjunction. If you just put a comma between them, that's an error called a comma splice 2 or a comma fault:

Squiggly ran to the forest, Aardvark chased the peeves. (wrong)

What Is a Comma Splice?

Comma splices seem to be Scott Sigler's biggest problem. Here's an example from page 114 of the original Ancestor book, where one of the characters is talking about a cow named Fonzie:

Sara obviously named that one, she was a sucker for those old “Happy Days” reruns. (wrong)

It's easy to see in that example why the error is called a comma splice: it's because the comma is used to splice together two complete sentences when that isn't the function of a comma.

The good news is that it's easy to fix a comma splice once you're aware of the problem. Because the two clauses are complete sentences, you can treat them that way and use a period where you had a comma.

Sara obviously named that one. She was a sucker for those old “Happy Days” reruns.

It's a period's job to separate complete sentences.

How to Use a Semicolon to Fix a Comma Splice

If the two sentences are closely related to each other, as they are in the sentence from Ancestor, you can use a semicolon to connect them without a coordinating conjunction.

Sara obviously named that one; she was a sucker for those old “Happy Days” reruns.

The semicolon makes sense because the second clause expands on the reasoning of the first clause. He's saying that it's obvious that Sara named the cow because she liked “Happy Days” reruns and the cow is named after a “Happy Days” character. (Want more? See Episode 189, How to Use Semicolons.)

You can think of a semicolon as a “sentence splicer” because its job is to splice complete sentences together.

How to Use Coordinating Conjunctions to Fix a Comma Splice

Sometimes, you can also fix a comma splice by adding a coordinating conjunction. It doesn't work with the example sentence from Ancestor because it doesn't make any sense to add an “and” or any of the other coordinating conjunctions. It changes the meaning to say Sara obviously named that one, and she was a sucker for those old “Happy Days” reruns.

But if I go back to the other sentence with a comma splice—Squiggly ran to the forest, Aardvark chased the peeves—you can see that it makes sense to connect those two sentences with a coordinating conjunction and a comma.

Squiggly ran to the forest, and Aardvark chased the peeves.

More Comma Splice Examples

Let's take one more of Scott's mangled 8 sentences and see if we can fix it!

This one is from page 29, where he's explaining how one of the characters lured 9 in investors 10 for his evil plan.

They were getting it, he had them. (wrong)

So in the comma splice repair kit 11, we've got periods, semicolons, and coordinating conjunctions. (See Episode 122: Is “Have Got” Acceptable English?)

The period definitely works: They were getting it. He had them.

The semicolon works because the two clauses are related: They were getting it; he had them.

And in this case we can add a coordinating conjunction to fix the problem too: They were getting it, and he had them.

Comma Splice Summary

So, I hope you get it! Commas aren't meant to join main clauses all by themselves; to force them into that role is to perpetrate a comma splice. That's bad, but it's easy to fix.

You, Sir, Are no Cormack McCarthy

Finally, another thing that's interesting is that the example sentences I used aren't in Ancestor anymore. Scott's writing has improved over the last three years, he reworked the book, and it probably had more extensive editing from Crown than it did with his initial small publisher. All the comma splices have been fixed 12.

The change highlights an interesting point about punctuation 13 and writing in general that sometimes comes up. People will argue that authors should be allowed to make stylistic choices about writing, and include comma splices or whatever quirks 14 they want as a matter of art. They'll point to best-sellers such as E. E. Cummings who used all lowercase letters or Cormack McCarthy who is known to use as little punctuation as possible, often avoiding commas, apostrophes and quotation 15 marks.

Occasionally, someone brilliant intentionally 16 bucks 17 the rules and still succeeds, but it's much more common for writers to have consistent errors like comma splices in their manuscripts not because they are brilliant renegades, but because they actually don't actually know the rules.

I've talked to many editors who do look at the grammar and usage in manuscripts and don't look kindly 18 on errors. Unless you want to make it more difficult to get your ideas across to editors and readers, stick with traditional punctuation.