ETS4分GRE写作Issue范文欣赏
英语课
Essay Response — Score 4
In all actuality, I think it is more probable that our bodies will surely deteriorate 1 long before our minds do in any significant amount. Who can't say that technology has made us lazier, but that's the key word, lazy, not stupid. The ever increasing amount of technology that we incorporate into our daily lives makes people think and learn every day, possibly more than ever before. Our abilities to think, learn, philosophize, etc. may even reach limits never dreamed of before by average people. Using technology to solve problems will continue to help us realize our potential as a human race.
If you think about it, using technology to solve more complicating 2 problems gives humans a chance to expand their thinking and learning, opening up whole new worlds for many people. Many of these people are glad for the chance to expand their horizons by learning more, going to new places, and trying new things. If it wasn't for the invention of new technological 3 devices, I wouldn't be sitting at this computer trying to philosophize about technology. It would be extremely hard for children in much poorer countries to learn and think for themselves with out the invention of the internet. Think what an impact the printing press, a technologically 4 superior mackine at the time, had on the ability of the human race to learn and think.
Right now we are seeing a golden age of technology, using it all the time during our every day lives. When we get up there's instant coffee and the microwave and all these great things that help us get ready for our day. But we aren't allowing our minds to deteriorate by using them, we are only making things easier for ourselves and saving time for other important things in our days. Going off to school or work in our cars instead of a horse and buggy. Think of the brain power and genius that was used to come up with that single invention that has changed the way we move across this globe.
Using technology to solve our continually more complicated problems as a human race is definately a good thing. Our ability to think for ourselves isn't deteriorating 5, it's continuing to grow, moving on to higher though functions and more ingenious ideas. The ability to use what technology we have is an exampleReader Commentary for Essay Response — Score 4This essay meets all the criteria 6 of a level-4 essay. The writer develops a clear position ("Using technology to solve our problems will continue to help us realize our potential as a human race"). The position is then developed with relevant reasons ("using technology to solve more complicat[ed] problems gives humans a chance to expand their thinking and learning" and "we are seeing a golden age of technology").
Point 1, "using technology," is supported with the simple but relevant notion that technology allows us access to information and abilities to which we would not normally have access. Similarly, point 2, the "golden age," is supported by the basic description of our technologically saturated 7 social condition. Though the overall development and organization of the essay does suffer from an occasional misdirection (see paragraph 3's abrupt 8 progression from coffee pots to the benefits of technology to cars), the essay as a whole flows smoothly 9 and logically from one idea to the next.
It is useful to compare this essay to the level-3 essay presented next. Though both essays entail 10 some surface-level discussion and often fail to probe deeply into the issue, this writer does take the analysis a step further. In paragraph 2, the distinction between this essay and the next one (the level-3 response) can most clearly be seen. To support the notion that advances in technology actually help increase thinking ability, the writer draws a clever parallel between the promise of modern, sophisticated technology (computer) and the actual "impact" of equally "promising 11" and pervasive 12 technologies of the past (printing press).?
Like the analysis, the language in this essay clearly meets the requirements for a score of 4. The writer displays sufficient control of language and the conventions of standard written English. The preponderance of mistakes are of a cosmetic 13 nature ("trying to solve more complicating problems.") There is a sentence fragment ("Going off ...") along with a comma ?splice 14 ("Our ability ... isn't deteriorating, it's continuing to grow ...") in paragraph 3. However, these errors are minor 15 and do not interfere 16 with the clarity of the ideas being presented.
v.变坏;恶化;退化
- Do you think relations between China and Japan will continue to deteriorate?你认为中日关系会继续恶化吗?
- He held that this would only cause the situation to deteriorate further.他认为,这只会使局势更加恶化。
使复杂化( complicate的现在分词 )
- High spiking fever with chills is suggestive of a complicating pylephlebitis. 伴有寒战的高热,暗示合并门静脉炎。
- In America these actions become executive puberty rites, complicating relationships that are already complicated enough. 在美国,这些行动成了行政青春期的惯例,使本来已经够复杂的关系变得更复杂了。
adj.技术的;工艺的
- A successful company must keep up with the pace of technological change.一家成功的公司必须得跟上技术变革的步伐。
- Today,the pace of life is increasing with technological advancements.当今, 随着科技进步,生活节奏不断增快。
ad.技术上地
- Shanghai is a technologically advanced city. 上海是中国的一个技术先进的城市。
- Many senior managers are technologically illiterate. 许多高级经理都对技术知之甚少。
恶化,变坏( deteriorate的现在分词 )
- The weather conditions are deteriorating. 天气变得越来越糟。
- I was well aware of the bad morale and the deteriorating factories. 我很清楚,大家情绪低落,各个工厂越搞越坏。
n.标准
- The main criterion is value for money.主要的标准是钱要用得划算。
- There are strict criteria for inclusion in the competition.参赛的标准很严格。
a.饱和的,充满的
- The continuous rain had saturated the soil. 连绵不断的雨把土地淋了个透。
- a saturated solution of sodium chloride 氯化钠饱和溶液
adj.突然的,意外的;唐突的,鲁莽的
- The river takes an abrupt bend to the west.这河突然向西转弯。
- His abrupt reply hurt our feelings.他粗鲁的回答伤了我们的感情。
adv.平滑地,顺利地,流利地,流畅地
- The workmen are very cooperative,so the work goes on smoothly.工人们十分合作,所以工作进展顺利。
- Just change one or two words and the sentence will read smoothly.这句话只要动一两个字就顺了。
vt.使承担,使成为必要,需要
- Such a decision would entail a huge political risk.这样的决定势必带来巨大的政治风险。
- This job would entail your learning how to use a computer.这工作将需要你学会怎样用计算机。
adj.有希望的,有前途的
- The results of the experiments are very promising.实验的结果充满了希望。
- We're trying to bring along one or two promising young swimmers.我们正设法培养出一两名有前途的年轻游泳选手。
adj.普遍的;遍布的,(到处)弥漫的;渗透性的
- It is the most pervasive compound on earth.它是地球上最普遍的化合物。
- The adverse health effects of car exhaust are pervasive and difficult to measure.汽车尾气对人类健康所构成的有害影响是普遍的,并且难以估算。
n.化妆品;adj.化妆用的;装门面的;装饰性的
- These changes are purely cosmetic.这些改变纯粹是装饰门面。
- Laughter is the best cosmetic,so grin and wear it!微笑是最好的化妆品,所以请尽情微笑吧!
v.接合,衔接;n.胶接处,粘接处
- He taught me to edit and splice film.他教我剪辑和粘接胶片。
- The film will be spliced with footage of Cypress Hill to be filmed in America.这部电影要和将在美国拍摄的柏树山乐队的音乐片段粘接在一起。
adj.较小(少)的,较次要的;n.辅修学科;vi.辅修
- The young actor was given a minor part in the new play.年轻的男演员在这出新戏里被分派担任一个小角色。
- I gave him a minor share of my wealth.我把小部分财产给了他。