新GRE写作issue实例：技术影响

 　　题目：

　　Humanity has make little real progress over the past century or so. Technological 1 innovations have taken place， but the overall condition of humanity is no better. War，violence， and poverty are still with us. Technology cannot change the condition of humanity.
　　人类在过去的一百年左右止步不前。技术在不断进步而人类的整体条件却没有改善。战争、暴力和贫困仍然困扰着我们。技术无法改变人类的处境。
　　正文：
　　In the past decade， the progression of the nature science profoundly influences people’ life. Thus， the issue of that whether technology can change the condition of humanity has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that technology could improve the circumstances of human beings as well as the state of humanity.Others claim that technological innovations could not shape the people’s conditions for there are still some evil things around us. In my view， with the advanced technology，human beings could not only make their life more convenient but also modify their conditions.
　　Humanity， in fact， has make real progress in recent years. There are numerous humanitarian 2 institutions around the world and they surely do the actions. For example，the 921 earthquakes， a horrible disaster， took approximate 2，000 people’ lives in Taiwan. There were many foreign rescue teams such as Turkey， Japan， America， etc，coming to help Taiwan and they also provided a great deal of goods and materials for people who lost their family members or homes. Their assistance certainly encouraged Taiwan’s people to go out of their sadness. For another example， International Red Cross Organization， established in 1863， always unselfishly support people without discrimination as to nationality， race， and religious beliefs. These organizations are unprecedented 3. Therefore， apparently 4， these are proofs that humanity is constantly progress.
　　Admittedly， wars， violence， and poverty are still taken place all over the world. However，people should not deny the development of humanity， because of these unsolved events. It is similar to that although today’s people could not come and go freely in the solar system， no one could neglect the significant progress of the space technology and astronautics today. Thus， people should try to find the solutions to these events rather than shirk and blame their responsibility to the technology. For instance，violence and poverty could be decreased through moral and skill education; peace negotiation 5 might avoid the unnecessary wars or dispel 6 the prejudice between two hostile countries.
　　Meanwhile， technological innovations are instrumental to change the conditions of human beings. Fist， with advanced technology， people have better living standard today than they did before. Therefore， they have more time and ability to help others regard as low-level. Second， humanitarian can educate people the concept of charity by today’s prospered 7 information technology such as newspaper， broadcast， TV sets，Internet， etc. Take an example， we can easily find the advertising 8 about relieving the refuges and paupers 9 through donation. Besides， advanced mass media not only clearly divulges 10 the situation of the poor countries that might be devastated 11 by wars but also rapidly conveys these information to all places of the world and hence indirectly 12 provokes commiseration 13 of the people receiving these messages. Technology， therefore， is a useful device to directly improve the people’ life conditions as well as to indirectly help people to recognize the cruelty of atrocities 14 and the important of humanity.
　　In conclusion， as the matter of fact， even if its step seems slow， humanity still continually progresses. It is the best evidence that many unprecedented charitable organizations have distinguished 15 results all over the world. Besides， with help of advanced of technology， people have more time and ability to benefit others who needs help. However， although wars and violence are still around the world， the better solution is to cultivate people the concept of humanity and to educate them how to relieve the disputes while having different opinions but to merely blame the responsibility to the technology.